Some students tend to play computer games rather than do sports. Why is this? What can be done to tackle the problem?

Games are one of the most effective
way
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ways
to feel refreshed and energetic. Some students
follows
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follow
physical games, while
other
any of various alternatives; some other
another
prefers playing by means of
computer
. In
this
essay, I will express my view to explain the reason behind
this
and what could be done to overcome
this
problem. To embark on, Students in
past few years
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the past few years
are found
be
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to be
much more unhealthier comparative to the students in
last decades
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the last decades
.
This
is because, in the ancient time, candidates used to spend a lot in extra curricular activities or physical games which involves full body movements, whereas, these days a plethora of students give priority to
computers
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computer
games. It impacts them adversely by being seated in a fixed posture
in addition
to starring at a screen continuously. It leads to health issues
such
as: Back pain and eyesight problems. To avoid
this
problem, parents should spend some time with their children to get
involve
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involved
in some activities like swimming, bicycling and other outdoor games, so that it would distract them from the bounded arena of computers.
Moreover
, students
now a days
the period of time that is happening now; any continuous stretch of time including the moment of speech
nowadays
are quite sensitive to pretend their rapport in the society. The usage of advanced
computer
games has now become a
stardom
a large structure for open-air sports or entertainments
stadium
or a status symbol for students. One starts feeling inferior, if observes other playing game using
computer
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a computer
,
this
is what we call 'peer effect'. The question here is
,
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,
who promotes the strategy of playing
computer
games? The answer is the elders, parents and teachers who don't restrict students to play
computer
games.
Hence by
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Hence, by
penalising or applying fines would suffice the purpose of reduction of students playing
computer
games. To conclude, people who encourage students to play
computer
games should take an appropriate stand and parents must come up with some alternative options to improve their
children's'
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children's
children
child
child's
health.

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