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Band 5.5

You are temporarily moving to a new city for your job. You will be there for three months, and you would like to rent some accommodation for your stay. Write to an accommodation rental office. In your letter •Tell them how long you are staying •Describe the type of accommodation you would like •Explain what facilities you will need nearby

#city #job #three #months #rent #accommodation #office #•tell #•describe #type #•explain #facilities
Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing
this
 letter to ask you about looking for accommodation in HCM city. I am going to stay in HCM city next month from 1st February till May which is three months
due to
 my job. During that time I would like to have a small apartment including a bedroom, a bathroom and a kitchen, one more thing it will be great if it has a coffee machine that I can drink coffee every
mornings
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. My work is located near the airport which means I want to stay near the airport in order to get to my office closer and avoid traffic jams.
Also
 if you can look for me an apartment near a supermarket, café, and movie
theater
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theatre
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 it would be suitable for me. I am looking forward to hearing from you soon. Yours faithfully, Trinh Ta
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Coherence & Cohesion
Ensure that each paragraph has a clear main idea and stick to it throughout the paragraph. Avoid mixing several requests or details in the same paragraph.
Coherence & Cohesion
Use a variety of linking words and phrases to show the connections between your ideas and to make the structure of your writing clear.
Task Achievement
Make sure to directly address all parts of the task prompt in your letter. Elaborate on each point to ensure a complete response to the prompt.
Task Achievement
Maintain a consistent and appropriate tone throughout the letter. Formal greetings and closings are suitable for this type of correspondence. Avoid contractions and use full forms in formal writing.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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