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Some people think it is better to spend and enjoy their money once they earn it. Others think it is better to save their money and enjoy it in the future. Which stand do you agree with and why? Use specific reasons and examples to support your opinion.

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Some believe that younger adults should splash out all the
money
 that they earn and enjoy spending it.
However
, others are of the opinion that saving
money
 for the future would be a wiser decision for youngsters to be made, including me. On the one hand, saving
money
 from a young age can give people concerned a better opportunity to build their future life. The reason would be, at an early age people tend to be more productive and go the extra mile.
Therefore
, they are more capable of earning
money
 and working hard to reach their goals.
As a result
 of
this
, the more they try to make
money
, the more they can save their wage.
This
 leads to them being able to use their savings in case of emergency or even improving their standards of living. As an example, buying a house requires years of budgeting and saving in young adulthood.
Furthermore
,  as the elderly might be faced with some health-related issues, they should have been budgeting for young ages to be able to pay the cost of their treatments.
On the other hand
, some ambitions could be better fulfilled in their own golden time to give a high level of satisfaction. It means that if youngsters do not enjoy their
money
 and make their wishes come true, they might be left with regrets.
However
, people's priorities will change over time.
In other words
, regret wouldn't be a serious issue in the long term. All that has been said, some think enjoying
money
 for young adults is a good decision,
while
 others, including me, believe that to lead a life to the full and make a better future, the younger population should be careful with the amount of
money
 they make.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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