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Nowadays animal experiments are widely used to develop new medicines and to test the safety of other products. Some people argue that these experiments should be banned because it is morally wrong to cause animals to suffer, while others are in favour of them because of their benefits to humanity. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

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Technologies keep the tendency of growing, but humanities still
use
animals
 in
experiments
 for testing the safety of the
products
. I believe that
this
 is unmorally and many people agree with me
while
 others think that
this
 is okay and we need to do
this
 because it gives us an opportunity to check if the
products
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 usable for people. Let’s take a look at both of these views. On the one hand, we can see many
animals
 suffer; which is really painful for them. In fact, for fabrics
use
 them for finding the best formula for their medicine or cosmetics because
this
 is
a
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 cheapest way and they can do a considerable number of
experiments
 and
finally
 do many
products
.
Also
,
this
 way of testing is the most trustworthy and many researchers say that testing
products
 on
animals
 make them normal for humans.
However
, here are some ways of testing without
animals
 which are more ecological and tolerant but at the same time not enough trustworthy. In my point of view a better to
use
 these methods and probably do them more reliably.
On the other hand
, we can look at many dangerous methods that actually do not
use
animals
, but are they qualified enough? Many scientists say that to enrol on the same
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 as we can have in
experiments
 which
use
animals
, we need to spend a considerable amount of time, and probably take risks to our health.
That is
 the reason why some people suppose that we can
to
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continue
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 do
experiments
 that include
animals
.
However
, we should remember that
this
 is morally wrong.
Finally
, I can say that problem with killing
animals
 because of our purposes is wrong, in we should solve
this
 problem step by step, because starting doing different methods may be seriously dangerous.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Ethics
  • Morality
  • Vivisection
  • In vivo testing
  • Cruelty-free
  • Animal welfare
  • Biomedical research
  • Toxicology
  • Sentience
  • Compassionate
  • Humane
  • Speciesism
  • In vitro
  • Alternative methods
  • Pharmacology
  • Clinical trials
  • Bioethics
  • Animal rights
  • Pain threshold
  • Efficacy
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