the two maps below show road access to a city hospital in 2007 and in 2010.
The maps compare the
road
routes to a Use synonyms
city
hospital in 2007 and 2010.
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Overall
, the Linking Words
City
Hospital in 2007 has a bus stop Use synonyms
while
in 210 there is none but a roundabout.
The Linking Words
car
Use synonyms
park
both Use synonyms
staff
and public was situated at the same location, Use synonyms
whereas
in 2010, the public Linking Words
car
Use synonyms
park
and Use synonyms
staff
Use synonyms
car
Use synonyms
park
are located separately. There are two gates, one from the public Use synonyms
car
Use synonyms
park
and the other from the Use synonyms
staff
Use synonyms
car
Use synonyms
park
, leading into the hospital in 2010. From the bus station, there are Use synonyms
also
two routes, both Linking Words
connect
to the public and Wrong verb form
connecting
staff
Use synonyms
car
Use synonyms
park
through the Ring Use synonyms
Road
, hospital Use synonyms
road
and Use synonyms
city
Use synonyms
road
.
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In contrast
, the Linking Words
city
hospital in 2007 had only one gate located opposite the Use synonyms
car
Use synonyms
park
and connects to the Ring lane, hospital roadway and Use synonyms
city
route.Use synonyms
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