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Some people think certain prisoners should be made to do unpaid community work instead of being put behind bars.

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Many individuals claim that
lawbreakers
 must be worked in public areas in order to repent them and I completely agree with
this
 statement as criminals will benefit the
government
 financially by functioning in crowded areas
also
 it would be a good chance for prisoners to become a normal part of society. Nowadays we are living in a world where crime is being increased day by day.
Lawbreakers
 often repent in prisons, but there are
also
 other ways of punishing them by offering them community projects
such
 as working as a cleaner on subways or on roads. Because
this
 can be the most common way for the
government
 to keep the country’s cash for other needs in society.
For example
 for road reconstruction,
this
 is not a secret that almost all countries have road problems which lead to traffic congestion, the
government
 can spend that money on expanding the city roads. On the other ,hand forcing prisoners to do society works can offer a number of benefits to
lawbreakers
 too, because
while
 working they will be among the public and they will be able to show positive changes in their behaviour which might reduce the total date of their prison term,
however
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 there are people who were put in a cell forever can
also
 get less strict regime benefits by working on community projects. In conclusion, the majority of people believe that criminals should do social work and I completely agree with that statement as
this
 can be a real benefit for the
government
 but
also
 for
lawbreakers
 too.
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