the diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.

the diagram below shows the manufacturing process for making sugar from sugar cane.
The given process diagram depicts the manufacturing stages of
sugar
production out of
sugar
cane
.
Overall
, producing
sugar
in factories consists of 7 various stages starting from
growing
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the growing
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process of the
sugar
cane
and ending by drying and cooling the final product.
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first,
to produce
sugar
we need
the
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sugar
cane
which takes about 1 year to 1 year and
half
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to grow
compeletely
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completely
, after that there are two options for harvesting it, it can be harvested both by
hands
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or by suitable and
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machines. Following the second stage,
sugar
cane
enters
crushing
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the crushing
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process which ends by producing a
juic
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juice
which later gets purified through a limestone filter.
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the fifth stage, filtered juice turns into syrup by means of an
evaporatore
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evaporator
evaporative
heating on fire and
then
, a centrifuge separates the crystals of
sugar
from the syrup.
Finally
, the product which passed through
6
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former stages of manufacturing should be dry and cool in fact to produce what we call
sugar
.
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