There are many different types of music in the world today. why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the International music that is heard everywhere nowadays?
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songs
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due to
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decrease
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decreases
people
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music
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songs
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are
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is
moreover
manage pain and agony.
Today, international music
which is heard everywhere are
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music
notably among new
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for international
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traditional one isn't more crucial than international Song.Submitted by alimsvvv5 on
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