There are many different types of music in the world today. why do we need music? Is the traditional music of a country more important than the International music that is heard everywhere nowadays?

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Music
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is a part of
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the culture
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of every country and area and it is an inseparable section of human beings,
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addition
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this
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has
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extension
domination in the world and it's full of several styles
such
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as
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, Rock, Rap, Hip hop, classical, Jaz, etc.
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are
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a treatment
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for our souls and
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help us to relax with reducing stress. Nowadays young
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prefer to
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new
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with lyrics that correspond with their spirit and think International
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musics
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music
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are
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very popular among
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more
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than traditional ones. On the one hand, There are various types of
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musics
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music
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all around the world.
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is vital in our life
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numerous reasons.
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causes
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decrease
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stress when
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face
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a stressful situation.
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,
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have done an experiment about it,
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for example
they divided
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a group
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three parts,
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they played calm
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musics
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music
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for some of them,
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for
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group
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they played the sound of water waves and for the
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, they didn't play anything, so They found that, the first
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when
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exposure
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with stressors they treated softly despite of others.
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,
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is good to boost
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our energy and motivation to do our tasks,
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, if the song has a Fast and happy rhythm,
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can
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an effect on the speed of our performance to do our chores but if it has a slow rhythm, it will improve our memorise and will
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create
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an improvement in our brain function.
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some
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believe that
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music
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is just for funny and is one of the distractions,
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the
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favorite
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song is amazing for our concentration, especially in studying.
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,
listen
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listening
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to the
songs
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are beneficial for treating sycological disorders
besides
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are
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helpful to have a good sleep,
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manage pain and agony. Today, international
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which is heard everywhere
are
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more extensive than traditional
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notably among
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generation.
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is famous
international
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for international
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music
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and has
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as a commercial
music
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,
as well as
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it has the most sales,
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most of the
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are fond of
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musics
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music
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.
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,
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traditional
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. In conclusion, in the world exist
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a lot of
different
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of
songs
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which are effective in our lives,
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furthermore
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it's essential to listen to
the
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our
favorite
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songs
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and
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musics
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music
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between other
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musics
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music
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are popular among teenagers generally young
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,
hence
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traditional one isn't more crucial than international Song.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • emotional release
  • cultural significance
  • globalization
  • cultural exchange
  • technology
  • preservation
  • cultural heritage
  • social cohesion
  • expression
  • consumption
  • production
  • traditional music
  • international music
  • diversity
  • identity
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