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Nowadays, many people communicate using social media and the internet on the daily basis. However, this had led to an increase to an online attacks and cyber bulling. What are some the reason why people take part in cyber bullying? What are the effects on the children and teenagers who are victims of cyber bullying?

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As the technology domination in around the world, people prefer communication to others by social media and the internet
such
 as Facebook, WhatsApp, Instagram, and Twitter.
However
, the negative impact of the internet and social media on teenagers and children has led to cyber bullying
due to
 a lack of empathy,
as well as
 jealousy of others. The effect on the victims can create mental health problems and emotional distress, with both immediate and long-lasting shock. Paragraph 1: The growing threat of online harassment and it is far reaching consequences. With the lack of empathy of some individuals, they usually have no emotional understanding of some peole.
For instance
, they repeatedly making fun of a person online or picking on them via email or text message. Controlling and jealousy
also
 play the main role, as they cannot have the things that others achieve.
In particular
, they try to belittle by making online threats, spreading rumors, and posting unflattering pictures or videos. Paragraph 2: The effects of cyber bullying to teenager and children can be both immediate and long-lasting impacts.
This
 includes emotional distress can led to serious problems in both kids and adolescents. To show you what I mean, those are humiliation, isolation, anger, and feelings of powerlessness, aggressive behaver.
Furthermore
,
this
 can lead to mental health problems. As they get depression, anxiety, low self-esteem, academic difficulties, suicidal thoughts, and self-harm. Conclusion: The developed of society and the internet has impacts to children and youngsters
due to
 the lack of empathy and jealousy of someone elses success. Emotional distress and mental health burden. It is a complex issue as the bully could be located anywhere in the world. The focus on the victims and the strategy to help them overcome cyberbullying.
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