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The plan below show a school in 1985 and the school now. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

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The given maps illustrate how a school has changed since 1985.
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, it is discernible from the maps that there have been additional
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, trees and new sports facilities in order to serve the growing number of students. In 1985, the school population was around 1500 students. There were spacious playing fields, which accounted for roughly half of the campus, on the south of the map. In the west wing, a cluster of educational facilities, including an office, a library, a small car park and
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, was separated from an east classroom block with 2 storeys by a
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 in the middle of the map.
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road
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 connected playing fields with a big car park and the main
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 on the north. At present, the number of students has increased to 2,300. The playing fields have been reduced in size to give way for additional
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, a pool, a fitness centre and the relocated
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 which have been enlarged.
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 the office remains static, the library has become smaller and transferred into a learning resources centre that includes a computer room. The central
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 has been replaced by trees and the classroom block adjacent to them now has one more floor. Another noticeable change is that the small car park has been demolished and the big rectangular one has transformed into a semicircle.
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