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You recently booked a part-time course at a college. You now need to cancel your booking. Write a letter to the college adminisllator. In your letter • say which part-time course you booked • explain why you need to cancel your booking • ask about booking a different course Write at least 150 words. You do NOT need to write any addresses. Begin your letter as follows: Dear Sir or Madam, #course #college #adminisllator #addresses #sir #madam Dear Sir or Madam,

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Dear Sir or Madam, I am writing to let you know that currently I am enrolled in the "Python for Data Analysis" course and I want to withdraw my booking. Let me explain my situation. Nowadays, I am super busy in a remote job there are a lot of commitments which I need to fulfil.
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, I feel like if I continue to develop my Python knowledge I will neither learn it nor be able to achieve my goals.
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, it is relatively a low-priority task and its timing conflicts with meetings.
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, would you kindly consider my program cancellation request?
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, I want to inquire about whether is there any course that your institute offers for SQL query performance. In fact, I will definitely enrol in 2nd quarter of
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 are much in demand. Thank you for your consideration. Yours faithfully, Haris Khan

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logical structure
Ensure there is a clear and logical progression of ideas throughout the letter. Each paragraph should have a clear central idea and subsequent sentences should develop that idea further.
greeting and closing
The use of 'Dear Sir or Madam' and 'Yours faithfully' is appropriate, well-placed and aligns with the format of a formal letter.
single idea per paragraph
Stick to one idea per paragraph. In your letter, the paragraphs were mostly organized with separate ideas which is good, but make sure not to mix reasons and inquiries unnecessarily.
complete response
Your letter covers the necessary points but could expand on the explanation of the situation. The reasons for canceling could be elaborated to better explain how the course conflicts with your current commitments.
suitable writing tone
The tone of the letter is generally suitable for a formal letter to an administrator, with polite language and appropriate expressions. Keep maintaining this in future correspondence.
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