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You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

You should spend about 20 minutes on this task. The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million). Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.
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The table illustrates the statistical information
of
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 the changes
of
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in
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 international travel places from 1990 to 2005, and the counts categories
includes
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include
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 Africa,
America
,
Asia
 and the
pacific
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Pacific
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, Europe and
Middle
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the Middle
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 East.
Overall
,
it is clear that
 the total
number
 of
tourists
is
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increased steadily, from 448.9
million
 in 1990 to 693.7
million
 in 2005. At the same time, Europe is the
mostly
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most
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 popular place for travelling which is the largest
categories
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category
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 of the
number
 of
tourists
 in 20 years period,
also
 from 280.2
million
 in 1990 increased to 400.2
million
 in 2005. In
constrast
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contrast
,
Middle
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the Middle
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 East is the lowest popular place rather than others, only has 9.8
millions
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million
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tourists
 in 1990 and slightly increased to 15.8
millions
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million
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 in 2005. It is
also
apparents
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apparent
 that, in 1990
America
 is popular than
Asia
 and the
pacific
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Pacific
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 area. The
number
 of
tourists
 in
America
 is 80.5
millions
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million
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 and 60.2
millions
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million
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 in
Asia
 and the
pacific
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Pacific
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 area.
However
, the
number
 of
the
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tourists
 increased
double
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doubled
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 in
Asia
, from 60.2
millions
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million
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 to 135.8
millions
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million
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 in 2005.
Next,
the
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America
's
tourists
also
increasde
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increased
increase
signicficly
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signific
 to 113.2
millions
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million
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 in 2005.
Furthermore
,
the
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Africa'
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Africa's
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tourists
 increased steadily from 18.2
millions
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million
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 in 1990 to 28.7
millions
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million
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 in 2005.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words america, asia, number, tourists, million, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 5 times.
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