Some people like to keep a record of their own experiences by uploading pictures and other information to social-networking sites. Other people prefer not to create such records. Which approach do you prefer, and why? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

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Nowadays, the global revolution can provide a convenient life for many people. It can be seen that some people like to collect documents of their own memorised by uploading media to social platforms. In my opinion, I would rather prefer to create catalogues in my own personal evidence because

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more private and secure than announce to the public.

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, consider the advantage of using statistics online in daily life. It is extremely useful to maintain the feeling, which means a thing from the past.

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, there is no denying that it is more disadvantage of social media

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as scammer, lure and haker, there can copy personal statistics and use them for their own. From my point of view, there are numerous reasons why people collect their own data in cyberspace.

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Grammatical Range: 8.0

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Fully explain your ideas

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