Today more people are overweight than ever before. What in your opinion are the primary causes of this? what are the main consequences of this issue.

Nowadays, the number of overweight
people
is increasing than the past ever. In my opinion, I agree with
this
issue because of the technological revolution and
convinient
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convenient
needs in
people
were
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trend. The implication of
this
is making
people
who are
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fatter and some more consequences of
this
issue. For the primary reason,
technological
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revolution
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changed
working
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behaviour of
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caused less activity and the consequence of overweight
people
as well. In the
lastest
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decade of
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century, most of working outside jobs had been
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transferred
to working in offices by the
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convenient
technology,
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computer
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.
People
did not need to
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out for
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transferring
papers, they could trade information by
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e-mail.
Moreover
, televisions, radios, and
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were the best technological productions for them to
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which
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updated information
such
as news at home
instead
they moved out.
In addition
, most outdoor activities
such
as sports,
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, camping,etc. were replaced by TV programs.
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,
according to
the news on
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vnexpress.net, Most
people
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spend their time playing computer games or watching
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than before because It is easy to
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approachable
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the
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other reasons, When the
convinient
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convenience
needs
in
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human is highly in growth, that's why many fast food companies follow
this
trend to serve
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needs of
people
. Meanwhile, home-cooked is not the best solution for them
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busy day.
Hence
, fast food consumes
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of calories
such
as many sugars and fatty
subtances
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substances
that keep inside
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the human
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body for a long time and
difficulty
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to put
it
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out without
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activities or
play
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sports.
This
has led to
people
to more fat ever.
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people
has increased rapidly in the
last
few
year
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until now. In Conclusion, the technological revolution and
convinient
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convenience
needs
such
as eating fast food in
people
that are
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causes to make
people
are
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fat, bringing unforeseeable consequences
about
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human health and serious problem diseases.
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