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In their advertising, businesses nowadays usually emphasize that thier products are new in some way. Why is this? Do you think it is a positive or negative developments?

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Global
companies
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are
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play an important role
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 every nation and business in the global economy.
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, significant growth in the economy is needed for the country’s development.
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this
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 reason, advertising is necessary to get reach
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a
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 public.
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 with, It is natural for
companies
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 to emphasise some new points of their goods because that can attract consumers.
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, For people, it would be reasonably expected that something "new" means something
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 of "developed."' interest.
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, when a new model of 'iPhone' needs to appeal to additional features or how their product has been improved than before.
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, the purpose of advertisement is to reach customers and sell the
products
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.
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 , it is reasonable to focus on novel parts of
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 for most
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some people say that high-competition
companies
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 in the advertising area trying to contention to new points have a
risk
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 to create misleading advertisements,
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, it is necessary to restrict
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 advertising.
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, I disagree with
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 idea.
On the other hand
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, for the purpose of advertising something new points,
companies
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 need to develop their
products
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.
This
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 is the reason why
companies
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 spend a huge amount of money on research and development areas, advancing technology. The development in fields and launching a new product make our lives better, and I think
this
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 benefit is more essential than the
risk
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 that the opponents state. In conclusion,
companies
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, emphasising new aspects of their
products
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 are effective to reach their customers.
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,
while
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 there is a
risk
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 of misinformation advertisement
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, the benefits of encouraging
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 advertisements outweigh the drawbacks.
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