some people believe that it is best to accept the bad situation, such as an unsatisfactory job or shortage of money. others argue that it is better to try and improve such situations. discuss both these views and give your own opinion

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people are divided about the idea of whether individuals should attempt changing their
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circumstances or they have better to strive for better life qualities. In
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intend to discuss both opinions.
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, I firmly agree with the latter view. on the one hand, the proponents of dealing with unfavourable situations argue that people can not expect everything
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their desires because humans are
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per se. they never can lure their heart
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in order that they always crave
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the best and it is
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their instinct.
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, all individuals have experienced the situation that they efforted overwhelming to gain
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achievement in their life and after a
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they underestimated
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or they created new goals to achieve it.
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is the reason why some believe that we should adapt ourselves to
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unpleasant circumstances
in order to nurture
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to find happiness in little things.
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, opponents opine that we live in
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era and making efforts for achieving high places
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inevitable. today
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of consumerism and
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many people endure many difficulties to improve their wealth status as
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aware that it has become
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for society.
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, it is observable in our societies that girls are more
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in well-off men. going on with
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flow would cause many mental issues
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as depression and isolation.
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, I reiterate that living in today's era
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rules which can guarantee our psyche's health slightly. attempting for better life qualities is one of
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • adversity
  • resilience
  • stoicism
  • contentment
  • cope
  • adapt
  • endure
  • persevere
  • settle
  • ambition
  • tenacious
  • determined
  • resourceful
  • optimistic
  • self-improvement
  • proactive
  • initiative
  • transform
  • overcome
  • confront
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