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You currently live in a rental apartment, and the noise from your neighbours disturbs you. Write a letter to your landlord. In your letter describe how this situation affects you; explain what steps you have taken to address the problem; ask the landlord to take action to resolve the issue.

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Dear John, I am writing to let you know about the noise my neighbour causes during my working hours. As you know, I work from home and my work begins at 10 am and finishes at 5 pm. Let me explain the situation to you
further
. My next-door housemate works at night and sometimes during the day, he plays loud music, which causes a lot of disturbance to me. I tried to resolve the issue on my own by having a conversation with him and explaining my problem to him. He always promises not to repeat
this
 behaviour,
however
, the situation hasn't changed. I even posted signs in the living room which requested all housemates to keep the volume down, but to no avail. Would you kindly let my neighbour know about my working hours and ask him to avoid playing loud music during that time?
Moreover
, you could set house rules for playing music at only certain times during the day. Adhering to these rules will be beneficial to all of us. Thank you for your consideration. Yours truly Robin
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Task Achievement
To enhance your letter and make it even more effective, consider describing with more specifics how the noise affects your work. This could make your case stronger and more compelling.
Coherence and Cohesion
Ensure each paragraph clearly focuses on a separate idea to maintain an organized structure. Your letter does it well, but keep this in mind for consistency in future writings.
Task Achievement
You did an excellent job describing the situation and how it affects you, which helps the landlord understand the urgency of your request.
Coherence and Cohesion
The structure of your letter, with a clear introduction, explanation of steps you've taken, and a polite request for action, is very effective.

Use a variety of complex and simple sentences

You should use complex sentences in your writing, but it does not mean that you should try to make all of our sentences complex.

‘Complex’ sentences are not actually very complex; they are just two or more simple sentences put together. Putting them together makes the essay more coherent and cohesive.

Examples:

I really want to study but I’m too tired.

I wore a warm coat because the weather was cold.

If action is not taken soon on climate change, global warming will get worse.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Noise pollution
  • Disturbance
  • Sleep deprivation
  • Quality of life
  • Considerate behaviour
  • Residential quiet hours
  • Sound insulation
  • Mediation
  • Tenancy agreement
  • Follow-up
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