in many countries have severe problems with students behavior. what do you this are the cause of this? what solution can you suggest?

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Schools
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all over the world are facing problems with their
students
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misbehaving in classes and around the school campus. I think the main reason behind
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could be
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their family background, illicit drug use and some may be having problems like developmental issues. In the following ,paragraphs I will explain more on the topic. To start with, usually
students
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portray their background story via manners.
Students
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come to the class late, doing all nonsense making it noisy. They will not do work on time but rather bunks the class failing their subjects.
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is because, their
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are divorced or under peer pressure, for ,instance a child of separated
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is under the influence of drugs, there are chances that his friends would
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join him to accompany exploiting not just himself but
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his peers. Some ill manner
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are mentally retarded. It is seen that most of the developing countries don’t have different
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for these challenged kids. Rather they are sent to the same school as those who are doing well. ,
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by those ,
students
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many good
students
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get spoiled
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their influence. In order to curb
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problem in all
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, every responsible person and agent should be involved including teachers,
parents
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, peer groups, counsellors and even government officials. Teachers are the most important person to bring to the discussion table to make changes. They should hold parent-teacher meetings regularly, initiate talks with peer groups, and inform counsellors about the student's behavioural records to plan their lessons
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politicians will bring policy changes on the issues, for ,example building separate
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for mentally challenged children so that these people get education separately. In conclusion, the rising number of ill-mannered
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in school is not just numbers; it is raising concern for
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, teachers and the nation as a whole.
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any possible measures need to be taken to solve
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issue.
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