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In many countries children are engaged in some kind of paid work. Some people regard this as completely wrong, while others consider it as valuable work experience, important for Learning and taking responsibility. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.

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While
 many people claim that
children
 should not be engaged in any kind of paid work, others argue that it is valuable for them to experience different activities learning something from that. On the one hand, the main aspect
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children
's development is to keep them healthy,
whereas
me
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some
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 types of paid work might be
quiet
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 dangerous for not only their physical health but
also
 it affects
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the
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 mental health
for example
 jobs as delivery
worker
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 in the building area are threatening for physical health where it is possible to get injuries to crash to someone
as a result
 in any case parents should control in what ways their
children
 is earning money.
On the other hand
, limiting
children
 from
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 by the reason of threats is not right as well, because attending in various communities has its own benefits,
such
 as gaining working experience, creating the sense of what working is, but apart from that teenagers learn to communicate with other people, making new connections.
Besides
,
children
 working will be more self-assured and responsible. Meanwhile, they will have their own money, which will teach kids to control them properly.
To sum up
, even though working for somebody is quite risky, I agree with the view that
children
 should at least try to experience the working process.
Hence
, coming across diverse difficulties will sharpen
children
's ability to take crucial decisions in real life, which will aid them to become well-being in the future.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Child labor
  • Exploitation
  • Minimum age
  • Work experience
  • Survival
  • Taking responsibility
  • Education
  • Poverty
  • Legal restrictions
  • Physical toll
  • Psychological impact
  • Cultural perceptions
  • International conventions
  • Economic impact
  • Work-study programs
  • Skilled labor
  • Unskilled labor
  • Developing economies
  • Moral implications
  • Professional development
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