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Many people think modern communication technology is having some negative effects on social relationships.

Many
people
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 think modern
communication
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 technology is having some negative effects on social relationships. Do you agree or disagree?
In
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 the dawn of the 20th century, Information
technolgy
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technology
 radically changed
way
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the way
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hummanity
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humanity
 could
commuinicate
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communicate
 and exchange information. Before
every one
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everyone
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 used computers and
smart phones
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smartphones
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,
people
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 communicated with one another using traditional methods
such
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 as letters,
telegraph
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telegraphs
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 and
telephone
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telephones
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.
Now a days
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, when it comes to
communication
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 there are
plenthors
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plethora
plethoras
 of tools at our disposal which can help
complete
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us complete
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 our tasks. It is stated that some
people
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belived
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believed
believe
 using modern
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commuication
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communication
 technology can occured
negative
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a negative
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 impact on Social
relationshsips
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relationships
.
However
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, in my opinion ,
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belived
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believed
believe
 that using new
communication
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 devices can
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 some positive
influnece
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influence
in
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on
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 social relationships,
but
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apply
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negative impacts bring more
outweights
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outweighs
it's
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its
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 merits. To
beign
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begin
 with,
communication
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 technology, especially internet
communication
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 like social networking
webistes
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websites
 and dating websites has created the path to
process
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the process
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 of socializing.
Moreover
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, Social networking websites enable
people
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 to easily keep in touch with family and friends,
whereas
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 dating
webistes
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websites
website
helps
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help
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the cmmuinity
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cmmuinity
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community
 to find someone compatible to be in a relationship with. On the other, there are many
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negative
 effects
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generated through modern
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commuication
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communication
 devices. Most
people
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 are
Social
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in Social
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 Isolation
due to
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high
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a high
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 volume of new
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commuication
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communication
 methods
such
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Face book
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Facebook
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, Instagram and many more. Nowadays, most
of
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apply
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companies are using social
network
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networks
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through
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apply
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online, but
this
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led
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lead
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 to Social Isolation. In some cases,many
of
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people
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re
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are
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 not closed
with
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to
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 the real world,
therefore
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due to
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 less social interaction
it
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apply
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can lead to
dpression
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depression
 and feeling loneliness.For
an
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apply
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example
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 Research has found that
,
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adult
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an adult
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 who
describe
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describes
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them selve
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themselves
 as
lonley
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lonely
 has
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doubled
 since society
involved
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is involved
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 with
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modern
communication
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 system.
This
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 can directly have an effect on a human happiness level.
Furthermore
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, implement of
new
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a new
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 mechanism for
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commuication
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communication
 is a huge
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threat
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for
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to
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children
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children's
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 safety.
In
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 present,most of the younger generation and kids are studying through computers and, mainly they are more
accessable
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accessible
 to
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the internet
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internet
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Internet
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. But
this
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 has
exposes
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exposed
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 them to a number of risks including graphic
sexsual
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sexual
 images,
online
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and online
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 bullying, particularly networking sites.
For instance
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, UNICEF has announced that during the
COVID 19
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 period
due to
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high
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the high
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 percentage of computer usage
between
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among
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 children, online
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 has
been
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increased by 20%.
To conclude
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,
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even though
 new
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commuication
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communication
 systems give us
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the opportunitly
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opportunitly
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opportunities
 to build
up
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apply
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the relationship
between
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over
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 long
distance
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distances
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 and get in touch with the world,
however
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 I agreed, there are many
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adverse
effect
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effects
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can
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that can
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casued
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cause
caused
not
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by not
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close
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being close
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with
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 the real world,
such
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 as
mentall
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mental
 issues and
also
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 risk for child safety.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • face-to-face interactions
  • messaging apps
  • social media
  • non-verbal cues
  • family bonds
  • dependency
  • digital communication
  • superficial relationships
  • cyberbullying
  • online harassment
  • social isolation
  • virtual connections
  • emotional satisfaction
  • real-life interactions
  • technological intrusion
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