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Around the world, rural people are moving to cities and urban areas, so populations in the countryside are decreasing. Is this a positive or negative development?

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In most countries
in
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all over the world, people who were living in the countryside are moving to
cities
,
therefore
 the
population
 of rural
places
 is reducing. I believe that it could be a detrimental advancement.
Population’s
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 increase could be able to change
the
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 suitable lifestyle to
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an unsuitable
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 one. Individuals who are living in rural could be able to
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the
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natural sources, but people who are living in
cities
 could not access these features and they face stress pollution and terrible traffic on a daily basis.
Cities’s
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inahitants
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inhabitants
have
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 not
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adequate time
for
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 experience a calm and quiet life because they should try as much as they can to support their heavy costs in expanded
cities
. The cost of
life
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 is more expensive than
rural
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in rural
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places
 so, increasing
population
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the population
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 of
cities
 by means of immigration from rural to
cities
 could make some financial problems.
By
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 decreasing the
population
 of rural
places
 which has happened
by
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movement
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the movement
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 to
cities
the
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accommodation
being
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 a vital issue. Most
of
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immigration
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 has happened without any certain program so, the
cities
has
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 expanded in
unsuitable
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an unsuitable
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 way.
Therefore
,
Mustafa
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 rural
places
 which
contains
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main
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 parts of natural
places
 like Forest Green
places
 and rivers should be destroyed
to
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development
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 of
cities
 to provide
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building, roads, houses and but a few.
On the other hand
 when the
population
 in the countryside is reducing and they move to
cities
 so the
population
 of
cities
 is increasing accommodation could
distroy
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destroy
 the nature and environment which has located in rural. In
conclusion
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 the decreasing
of
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population
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the population
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 which are living in rural by
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the movement
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movement
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moving
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 to
cities
 has
negative
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a negative
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 impact on people’s life situation and could cause
the
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 detrimental effect on nature.
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