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Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

#countries #money #poverty #aid
Nowadays many
countries
 have faced a
problem
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term
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 of finance
while
 some
countries
 are on
there
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their
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 way up to be rich in every aspect. Some people believe that to help the poorer
countries
 the richer
contries
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countries
 should help them by
provied
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provided
provide
a
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financial aid.
thus
, Some
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suggest
 that they should give other types of help.
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Although
 It is true that the poorer
countries
 will have more
money
 to drive the finance in their
maket
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market
 after they got the financial aid. Yet, it will only solve the
problem
 for a short
periode
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period
 of time, after they run out of
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money
 they will back to that crisis again if they don’t know how to manage it in the right way.
Moreover
, It seems like
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 of
problem
solve
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 doesn’t
not
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work
porperly
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properly
 on
pain
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a pain
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 point, to help them remain sustainable in
term
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terms
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 of
finanace
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finances
 might need to find a way that they can do it by
them self
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themself
themselves
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 in
a
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the
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 long
term
.
for instance
,
provied
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provide
provided
 them
a knowledge
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knowledge
a piece of knowledge
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 about how to gain an income
to
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for
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 their
countries
 by
promotiong
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promoting
 their uniqueness, it
couls
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could
 be their culture, food, history and many more. On the other
hands
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hand
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, it can be said that giving
the
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poorer
countries
money
 can boost
up
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their financial
problem
 in
a
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 short
term
. Yet, it still
provieds
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provides
an incomes
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incomes
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 to the
countries
 to
runs
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run
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 the
money
arounf
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around
 their
countries
 rather than freeze the
money
 to stuck in the same stage. In conclusion, I
personaly
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personally
believes
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 that to
provied
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provide
 the poorer country
the
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 other types of help might benifite thier financial
problem
for
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in
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a
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 long
term
 rather than a short period of time with
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financial aid.
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