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Band 5

Rich countries often give money to poorer countries, but it does not solve poverty. Therefore, developed countries should give other types of help to poor countries rather than financial aid. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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Nowadays many
countries
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 of finance
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 way up to be rich in every aspect. Some people believe that to help the poorer
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 the richer
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countries
 should help them by
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provided
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financial aid.
thus
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, Some
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suggest
 that they should give other types of help.
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Although
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 It is true that the poorer
countries
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 will have more
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 to drive the finance in their
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market
 after they got the financial aid. Yet, it will only solve the
problem
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 for a short
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period
 of time, after they run out of
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money
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 they will back to that crisis again if they don’t know how to manage it in the right way.
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 doesn’t
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work
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properly
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pain
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 point, to help them remain sustainable in
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term
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 of
finanace
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finances
 might need to find a way that they can do it by
them self
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themself
themselves
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a
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for instance
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provied
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provide
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knowledge
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 about how to gain an income
to
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for
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 their
countries
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 by
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promoting
 their uniqueness, it
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could
 be their culture, food, history and many more. On the other
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, it can be said that giving
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poorer
countries
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money
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up
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their financial
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a
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the
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term
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. Yet, it still
provieds
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provides
an incomes
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 to the
countries
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 to
runs
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run
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 the
money
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arounf
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around
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 rather than freeze the
money
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 to stuck in the same stage. In conclusion, I
personaly
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personally
believes
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 that to
provied
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provide
 the poorer country
the
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 other types of help might benifite thier financial
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 rather than a short period of time with
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financial aid.
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