Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor. Do you think this is a positive or a negative development? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Nowadays, a growing number of people with health problems are trying alternative medicines and treatments instead of visiting their usual doctor.

Do you think this is a positive or a negative development?

Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.
It is true that an increasing number of people who have health issues are giving different medications and treatments from a new
doctor
a try, rather than seeing the doctors that they visit regularly.
While
there are some benefits to trying different methods of
treatment
with another
doctor
, I think it is the best option to continue seeing the
doctor
that
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the
patient
usually pays visits
to
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. On the one hand, I consider that there are two benefits to visiting a new
doctor
for medical treatments.
Firstly
, the new medication or
treatment
the new
doctor
prescribes may be more effective in curing the
patient
's illness.
For example
, my previous
doctor
prescribed
a
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insufficient dose of diabetic medication. I asked him to rise the dose but he refused,
thus
, I looked for a new
doctor
who is better at diabetes
treatment
to have a more efficient
treatment
plan.
Secondly
, a new
doctor
may bring in a new perspective on treating the disease. To be more specific, though doctors receive almost the same education and knowledge, some doctors have more clinical experiences that may help with the
patient
's symptoms.
However
, there are
also
a few drawbacks to seeing another physician, I will discuss one here. It is possible that the new
doctor
might not know the person's medical history or medical condition to make the right
treatment
.
For example
, I heard news in China, there was a person, who knew nothing about his own disease and went to a different
doctor
. For some reason they couldn't find his medical record, deciding to ignore it and prescribed a medicine that he was allergic to, causing the
patient
's death. For
this
factor, I think it is not good to visit a new
doctor
without any preparation. In conclusion, it may be worth a try to try new methods that may cure the disease,
however
, for the reasons mentioned above, I think it is a negative development.
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  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

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  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • alternative medicines
  • treatments
  • positive development
  • negative development
  • health problems
  • usual doctor
  • access
  • personalized approach
  • holistic well-being
  • lack of regulation
  • evidence-based research
  • proper medical treatment
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