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some people think governments should spend money on measures to save languages with few speakers from dying out completely, others think this is a waste of financial resources. discuss both views and give your opinion.

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Due to
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 the development of the global economy, some
languages
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 are more likely to disappear in the future. Some people suggest that government should pay more attention to preserving these
languages
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 in order to protect cultural diversity. On the opposite, some opine that the cost of preserving
language
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 could lead to the funds of spending on some essentials. I believe that there is value in preserving endangered
languages
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, but the approach should be balanced and considerate of the
resources
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 available. On the one hand, there is no doubt that less spoken
languages
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 are not only means of communication, but
also
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 carry the cultural identity, history, and traditions. Those
resources
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 can be transformed into economic
resources
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 in order to develop and improve the tourism industry in different countries.
For example
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, Japanese people create many special cultural industries in Japan,
such
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 as cartoons, movies, and music.
Although
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 in the whole
world
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, compared to over the
world
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, only one country speaks Japanese,
this
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language
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 still plays an important role in today's
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, if it dies out in the future, their culture will die out at the same time.
On the other hand
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, preserving a
language
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 might weigh the potential benefits, especially considering the limited
resources
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 that could be used for some essentials like education, healthcare,
welfare
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 programs. In that
cases
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,
language
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 naturally evolves and changes over time, and the number of speakers of an endangered
language
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 might be too small that practical communication and education become challenging, making the preservation less feasible. The
world
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 is constantly changing, and culture naturally adapts. In a globalized
world
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, a dominant
language
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 means more economic opportunities and possibilities. To some less-spoken
languages
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 without appeal and value, the excessive invention from governments will waste a lot of money. In conclusion,
while
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language
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 preservation is necessary for cultural diversity and identity, it should be adapted to some balanced assessments and strategies. A holistic view that weighs the benefits against the costs and considers the desires of the communities involved is crucial in making informed decisions about
language
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 preservation efforts.
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