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In recent years, more and more people are choosing to read e-books rather than paper books. do the advantages outweigh the distadvantages?

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In the
last
 few years, a growing number of people prefer to read
e-
books
instead
 of printed
books
. In my opinion, there are more advantages to reading
e-
books
 as compared to paper
books
,
for example
, digital
books
 are more convenient
as well as
 eco-friendly in comparison to published
books
. Even though
e-
books
 are the new trending form of reading and users are increasing day by day, there are some serious problems associated with them.
Firstly
, the serious disadvantage of
e-
books
 is that they
required
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 reading from the computer screen, which can be tiring to the eyes.
Also
, long exposure to the screen and light can cause deleterious effects on eyesight. Another negative side of
e-
books
 is that the older generation finds it difficult to use the new technology and applications needed to install
e-
books
.
Moreover
, some readers even say that e-novels do not provide the same experience and feeling as reading a storybook holding in one’s hand. Despite of aforementioned, side-effects there are several benefits of
e-
books
. The most important one in my opinion is that they are more environment friendly as compared to publications, as they do not require paper for printing, which eventually saves billions of trees.
Moreover
, e-journals are more convenient
for instance
, Individuals can download multiple volumes from online stores and, can
also
 save them on various devices. In
this
, way a person can carry many
books
 simultaneously with them, which would not be possible with handbooks as they will be heavy and take up lots of space. In conclusion, e-book's advantages outweigh the disadvantages in numerous ways
such
 as providing convenience and variety at lower cost and helping environmental conservation
thus
, I believe, electronic
books
 are a more sustainable way of reading and enjoying
books
.
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