The pie charts below show the age groups of the users on different social media platforms in Australia in 2011

The pie charts below show the age groups of the users on different social media platforms in Australia in 2011
The pie charts give information about three different types of social media platforms that Australians in diverse age groups used in 2011.
According to
the first pie chart, the
users
of Facebook aged 18 - 34 constituted the largest percentage, at 29%. A slightly lower proportion of
users
for Facebook aged between 35 and 49, at 28%. What’s more, the figure for people in the over 50 age group accounted for less than a quarter of total
users
(24%), and the figure for those aged 10 - 17 was made up approximately
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(19%). As we can see from the pie chart on YouTube,it generally looks similar to the first one. The percentage of
users
aged between 18 to 34 was still the highest
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, at 30%. Almost the same percentages of
users
aged 35 - 49 and
users
aged above 50, at 26% and 24% respectively. It can be seen that the number of Twitter
users
in the 35 - 49 age group was the largest compared with others (40%). The figure for those aged 10 - 34 represented about half of the Twitter
users
, at 47% total.
However
, people aged between 50 and 60 and over 65 just constituted marginal parts, at 9% and 4% respectively.
Overall
, social media platforms were popular among the people in the 18 - 49 group in Australia,
while
the public aged over 50 were not particularly interested in those.
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