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Government should spend money on railways rather than roads. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

#government #money #railways #roads
Transportation is
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one of
major
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requirement
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 in the world and
the
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prople
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people
 hope
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 highest quality of that. The part of the society
think
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 that the government should pay
their
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attention to
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railways
 rather than roads. I completely agree with the statement and the essay would explain my argument. First of all, quickness and punctuation is the main reason. Most
people
 use trains as their transport method
due to
 the above reason.
As well as
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people
 prefer to reach
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 particular
destinationwithin
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destination within
short
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time
 period and sharp on
time
.
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, 2/3 of the global
people
trend
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 to travel by train to avoid the traffic jam
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 roads.
Nevertheless
, they can report their working
palce
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place
 on
time
 without
delaying
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.
Hence
,
railways
 are comfortable
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for human's
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human's
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 daily needs. The
secomd
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second
 factor is minimizing
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fuel wastage
bacause
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because
 trains can transport
bulk
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 of
people
 at one turn.
To
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 instance, approximately a train can bring 600
people
 at one
time
 and a private vehicle
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can only travel 4 or 5
peoples
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.
Therefore
,
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 of fuel can be reduced by the government through developing
railways
. In conclusion, I strongly believe that the government have a responsibility to develop and spend adequate money on
railways
 than road development.
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