The graph shows data about the annual earnings of three bakeries in Calgary, 2000-2010

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line graph illustrates information about the annual earnings of bakeries from 2000 to 2010.the

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AMANDIN

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,

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in BOLOCAKERY If we compare between AMANDINCE

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and MAEI BAKESHOP, we notice that in 2010 the yearly

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increased but daring the period from2009 to 2008 there was a slight fall in yearly

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by 80000$.

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, between 2006 and 2000 there was stability

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the AMANDINE

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, unlike the MARI BAKESHOP from 2005 to 2000 the yearly

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reached Mach higher 100000$.

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2008 saw a slight fall in yearly

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. It is interesting to notice that there was a sudden drop in BOIO CAKERY,

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as in 2000

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20000 yearly incomes,

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, from 2007 to 2003 there was stability. After that

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60000 in 2009.

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the yearly

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kept dropping in 2002. In conclusion, the

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of both Bolo Cakey and Amandine

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increased,

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the earnings of Mari Bakeshop saw a considerable fall over

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