The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant. You should write at least 150 words.

The chart below shows global sales of the top five mobile phone brands between 2009 and 2013.

Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below.

Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

You should write at least 150 words.
The bar chart illustrates the world mobile phone
sales
(
Samsung
,
Apple
,
Nokia
,
LG
, and
ZTE
) in three periods (2009,2011 and 2013).
Overall
, the chart presents an increase in
sales
for (
Samsung
,
Apple
, and
ZTE
)
while
Nokia
and
LG
show a decrease.
Firstly
, in 2009, we can see that the highest
sales
in the world from the five brands were
Nokia
at around 440,
then
Samsung
at almost 230, and around 220 for
LG
, 50 for
ZTE
, and almost 25 for
Apple
.
Secondly
, in 2011, there was a rapid rise in
sales
of
Samsung
and
Apple
(at around 320 and 95, respectively),
while
ZTE
showed a slight increase. The opposite for
Nokia
and
LG
shows gradually decreased
sales
(almost 420 and 95 respectively).
Finally
, in 2013, we can see a jump in
Samsung
sales
to 450 and a climb in
Apple
sales
to 150, with a slight change in
sales
of
ZTE
.
On the other hand
, a dramatic drop in
Nokia
's
sales
and a slight fall in
LG
's
sales
.
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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words sales, samsung, apple, nokia, lg, zte with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "show" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 3 times.
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