some people believe that professionalsi such as doctors and engineers, should be required to work in the country

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Recently,
people
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who had professional education have become a popular topic and many
people
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think it is worth discussing.
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, they still have not come to an agreement with each other on whether professional trainees like doctors and engineers can
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wherever they want
such
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as abroad or after graduating, they can stay and
work
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in the same
country
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. Whatever each side of the argument thinks, I strongly agree that they should
work
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no matter where. There are many reasons why I think.
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with,
people
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got
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a good education because they have a good career, so they always improve themselves. We know that whole countries give them
to have not
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the
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same status, facilities or money.
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, an engineer studies in Turkey, Even if he stays and works in Turkey, he knows that he will not be able to earn money and
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like abroad. For why, a maximum of 15.000TL is earned but the USA give a minimum of 5000 dollars. Another reason is that
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they often migrate to developed countries to be the best in their field and to learn new things. A good example of
this
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is that the doctor goes to the UK because it has very good health services and they have never seen them before.
On the other hand
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, some
people
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believe that they should stay
to
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in the
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work
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country
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where they study.
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, they can help the development of the
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and they contribute to the
country
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where
their
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they
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study
instead
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of another
country
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.
Because if
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they are in
the other
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another
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country
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and
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also
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their
country
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has some problems, they will
affect
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be affected
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badly. A good example is when a Ukrainian citizen works in Russia
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Russia and Ukraine
had
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are
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warring.
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, these
peoples
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people
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are very badly felt and maybe their psychology breaks down.
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, development is not only important for them but
also
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is a huge matter for all countries.
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, in spite of the fact their
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in their
country
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is important for their
country
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; they should focus on their own future. Life is their life ,not their
country
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.
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