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in some countries, number of people who visit the art gallerias are declining.what are the reasons for that? how can we solve this problem?

#countries #people #visit #art #gallerias
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 decline in
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 of
art
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galleria's
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 visitors in some nationalities, the current essay will discuss the causality of
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 trend and
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 represents some way to overcome it. visiting an
art
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 gallery
dose
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does
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 not seem to be
intresting
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interesting
 anymore in some nations and there has been a massive decline in
number
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 of visitors recently. There are several implications raising
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 problem, one of the prominent
one
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 is technology expansion. To clarify, most
of
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artists
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the artists
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 these days have
a
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 desire to show their
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art works
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artworks
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 on
a massive platforms
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a massive platform
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 and internationally.
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for
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 instance a painter who paints conceptual subjects surely has more
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 to display his work on
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internet
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 and gain more reputation in comparison with a local
art
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 gallery.
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Moreover
,
artists
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 who live in
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remote areas or small cities need to
publlicaly
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publicly
publically
 display their work and the best way is
representing
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 their work on
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the internet
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internet
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.
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, the number and variety of
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art works
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artworks
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 in galleries have
been
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decreased
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exponentially
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as
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 a
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less
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 people
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visit
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 these sites. There are some ways to rectify
current
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the current
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 stagnation
art
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gallerias
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galleries
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 suffer from.
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example
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 some
art
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 stations can act
diffrentely
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differently
 and break their old rules. To clarify, representing different
artisic
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artistic
 works
simultaniously
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simultaneously
 is
a
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 effective way to increase excitement in a monotonous,
old fashioned
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 atmosphere of
gallerias
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galleries
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.
therefore
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 more people tempt to
visit
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 these
site
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sites
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 because they have a chance to know different
artists
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, maybe take some photos by their side and make their
visit
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 memorable.
Morover
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Moreover
, music or local cooking events
are
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have the potential to be held in the same location or nearby. In
nutshell
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a nutshell
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, online platforms and websites
provids
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provides
provide
 a
substantioally
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substantially
 good platform both for
artists
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 and
art
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 lovers and people do not show
higher
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 level of desire to
visit
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 these sites anymore. The aforementioned problem can be solved if managers bring more
excitment
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excitement
 in atr
gallerias
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galleries
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.
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