Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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Nowadays, we see
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everywhere
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as in the streets, malls and airports.
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, it's extremely successful to let
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people buy everything. In my opinion, I totally agree
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statement, and I would like to discuss it in the following paragraphs.
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, the reason why I agree with because
,
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we can see
ads
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everywhere even
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indoors. What I mean
that
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parents and kids will be interested to buy it much fast
they
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as they
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could.
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, my dad saw an
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about (back to school). After
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my dad went to the student tools shop and bought a small bag for me
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of using my old bag.
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, that's a really good point to not forget to update our tools.
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, the coming
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from the social media
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, we are using the phone and
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come up directly.
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, I was going to watch a video on YouTube before the video started there
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an
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advertising
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appear
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talking about
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Friday
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which
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shows the discounts
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every single
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toy
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.
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, I fell in love with the remote car that cost five dollars
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ten dollars.
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, I order it online. Even so,
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advertising's
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make
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makes
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people
to
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buy things
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they
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forget to buy.
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, some people don't care or pay attention
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reason that they say it is
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a waste
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of money and not important to buy it.
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, that's
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wrong statement. Technology is coming
for
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popular, and the
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are spreading more and more.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • persuade
  • promote
  • attract
  • influence
  • impact
  • consumerism
  • commercialism
  • market
  • product
  • brand
  • endorsement
  • manipulative
  • saturated
  • overwhelmed
  • repetitive
  • distracting
  • irrelevant
  • exaggerated
  • misleading
  • desensitized
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