Some people say that advertising is extremely successful at persuading us to buy things. Other people think that advertising is so common that we no longer pay attention to it. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. Write at least 250 words.
Nowadays, we see
ads
in
everywhere Change preposition
apply
such
as in the streets, malls and airports. However
, it's extremely successful to let the
people buy everything. In my opinion, I totally agree Correct article usage
apply
for
Change preposition
with
this
statement, and I would like to discuss it in the following paragraphs.
Firstly
, the reason why I agree with because,
we can see Remove the comma
apply
ads
everywhere even in
indoors. What I mean Change preposition
apply
that
parents and kids will be interested to buy it much fast Add a missing verb
is that
they
could. Correct word choice
as they
For example
, my dad saw an advertising
about (back to school). After Replace the word
advertisement
that
my dad went to the student tools shop and bought a small bag for me Add a comma
,that
instead
of using my old bag. Moreover
, that's a really good point to not forget to update our tools.
Secondly
, the coming ads
from the social media while
, we are using the phone and ads
come up directly. For instance
, I was going to watch a video on YouTube before the video started there were
Change the verb form
was
an
Remove the article
apply
advertising
Replace the word
advertisement
appear
talking about Wrong verb form
appeared
black
Friday Capitalize word
Black
it
shows the discounts Correct pronoun usage
which
in
every single Change preposition
on
toys
. Change to a singular noun
toy
In addition
, I fell in love with the remote car that cost five dollars instead
ten dollars. Consequently
, I order it online. Even so, the
Correct article usage
apply
advertising's
Change noun form
advertising
make
people Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
to
buy things Change the verb form
apply
we
forget to buy.
Correct pronoun usage
they
Finally
, some people don't care or pay attention the
reason that they say it is Change preposition
to the
waste
of money and not important to buy it. Correct article usage
a waste
Furthermore
, that's totally
wrong statement. Technology is coming Add an article
a totally
for
popular, and the Change preposition
apply
advertisings
are spreading more and more.Replace the word
advertisements
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