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Band 4.5

It is often argued that we should put investment into our homes rather than hire it? Do you agree with this statement or not?

It is often argued that we should put investment into our homes rather than hire it. In
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 is it provides you
freedom
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 to design your
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 rooms,
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 you can do your hobbies more naturally. Provided that you rent a
house
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, you are not allowed to replace or fix some parts in that
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,
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: the ceiling,
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 colours of the walls.
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, you have to compensate exorbitant payments for any
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 renting that
house
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, or cannot get home too late at night.
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, you customize your
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 options in your
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, you will find it convenient to use these facilities, no one limits the time you spend on your hobbies in the evening or can annoy you during your work time.
The another
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 benefit of getting your own
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 is you will save
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money in
a
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 long term. The reason for my view is you may not only pay for electricity or gas bills but
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 the room fee, which you do not
to
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 spend money on if you live in your
house
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. So I suggest that when you get a well-paid job and settle down your life, you need to buy a
house
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 to save a large budget for
others
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 plans in the future rather than pay for renting a
house
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.
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 many people cannot afford to buy a
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, I hope
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 essay the above clear benefits will encourage you to invest in a private
house
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 rather than rent it.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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