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Some people think that government can save the envirinment while other people think that people needs to take responsibility. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

#people #government #envirinment #responsibility
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A minimal amount of
people
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 consider that
government
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 could rescue the natural resources.
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 some
people
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 believe that the
environment
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 was being guarded by folks. In my opinion, I agree that mother nature should be taken care of by human beings. On the one hand, there are several reasons that the
environment
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 was protected by the administration.
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 , setting off rules as a strategy was applied in their country to take care of natural resources easily.
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 that, if the
residents
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 violate laws, they are accountable for their actions as tried in the country's law.
This
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 can lead
people
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 to obey the rules of the authority.
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, the ministry was noticed to put litter in bins, if the citizen throws garbage away, they will be fined by the
government
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.
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,
people
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 must be amenable to the law, if they do not penalty so that the
environment
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 will improve.
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, there are drawbacks regarding setting up and proposing new laws to protect the
environment
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, if the
residents
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 do not
have
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 acknowledge to protect the climate.
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, the
government
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 must transmit messages to
residents
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 about protecting the
environment
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 is vital. So the
residents
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 consider their actions whether impact natural resources or not.
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, the
government
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 was informed that the environmental situation is crucial,
we
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and we
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 need to take care of the
environment
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,
,
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otherwise
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 new generations of us will be affected.
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,
people
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 take responsibility for their actions. In my conclusion, habitat protection is a long story that we haven't solved yet. From my perspective, the protected
environment
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 needs to be saved by
residents
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.
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