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In many parts of the world, childeren's lives very different from today. What do you think were the advantages and disadvantages of life for childeren in the past?

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The lives of
children
 in today's society are changing so much compared to the past because the world has changed. In the ,past there were both advantages and disadvantages to
children
's living standards. There were a number of benefits of living in the past for
children
. First of all, they were away from different internet devices and games.
In other words
, they had more time with friends and family.
Children
 played various games in nature with friends.
For instance
 , climbing trees, and swimming in the river. If
children
 play in nature, it was improve their cardiovascular fitness, increases endurance and
also
 made their posture perfect. Especially, improved the communication between
children
 and the quality of leadership in the past.
On the other hand
, in my opinion, one of the biggest disadvantages was the lack of access to education. These days technologies are developing.
Children
 had more spend time with friends and the environment. Compared to earlier
children
, now they are getting a wide range of knowledge and
also
 spending their time effectively.
To sum up
,
while
 there were some advantages to
children
 in the past they were
also
 significant disadvantages,
such
 as lack of education and no opportunity to choose.
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