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Table and bar chart show how journey times in a city centre changed after improvements were made to the transport network, and the costs of using different form of transport in the city?

Table and bar chart show how journey times in a city centre changed after improvements were made to the transport network, and the costs of using different form of transport in the city?
The table shows that
journey
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times
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 in a city centre changed after the
improvements
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 were made to the transport network. The paragraph shows the costs of using different
transports
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transport
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 in the city.
Overall
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, all
transports
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transport
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journey
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times
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 changed after the network improvement.
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, taxis ' and cars'
journey
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times
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 increased after the network improvement.
On the other hand
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journey
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times
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 of trams and buses have reduced.The costs of
journey
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times
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 are between 1.80 euro and 40 euro.The
times
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 of
journey
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 were between 10
minutes
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 and 22
minutes
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 before the
improvements
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 and after the
improvements
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 they are from 12
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 to 23
minutes
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.
It is clear that
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 all kinds of
transports
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journey
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times
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 in the table are changed. There are 4 kinds of transport in the table and each of them has different
times
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 and in the
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bagraph
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paragraph
 there are their costs. First of all, the tram is faster than the bus before and after the
improvements
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, but the fastest transport taxi in both situations. 161 words

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 85%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words journey, times, improvements, minutes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "changed" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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