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Some people think that single-sex schools are better than mixed schools. Others believe that mixed-sex schools are the only way for children to learn. Discuss both sides and give your own opinion

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Some people see that one sex
schools
 are better than mixed
schools
 as
students
 will be more intelligent and relaxed,
while
 others think the opposite view believe that when
students
 mix ed together they will be more suitable for
live
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.In my point view, I believe that
one sex
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schools
 are better than other
schools
 . Some human beings prefer mono-gender
schools
.They believe that when their children mixed together at
early
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an early
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 age ,they will be in
struggle
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a struggle
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 either to start
communication
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communicating
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 with the other gender and pay attention and love to the other gender
,
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or to focus only
in
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 their studying.
For instance
, the
students
 that are in
mono gender
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mono-gender
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schools
such
 as some
schools
at
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 many Arabic
countries
 those
students
 recorded
the
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 high
certifications
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 score than
other
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others
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 who are in mixed
schools
 in the same
countries
.
In contrast
, others see that when the student mixed together they can know the
different
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difference
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 between the
mind set
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mindset
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 of
male
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males
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 and
female
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females
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in
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an
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 early age .
Therefore
, they will have the knowledge to communicate with each other easier in the future when they become
adult
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.
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,.
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the
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Europe
countries
 adopt
this
believe
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like
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America and German and many other
countries
. In conclusion, it is argued if
seprating
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separating
 the two genders in
schools
are
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 better or not. Some see that it is better to
seprate
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separate
 them they will pay more attention to their journey of learning .others see that they will have opportunities to make
more
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better communication in the future if they
where
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were
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 mixed together .In my
opinion
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,opinion
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 it is better to
seprate
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separate
 them.
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