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In large towns and cities, people often know very few of their neighbors. What problems can this cause? What can be done about these problems? Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

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In cities,
people
 do not know their
neighbours
.
This
 problem can cause a
lack
 of social
skills
 in
people
, and they may not be aware of current issues in their town. To tackle the issue, they should make a group where they can socialize with their
neighbours
. If
people
don’t
 know their
neighbours
, they know nothing about their community.
Also
, they
lack
 social
skills
 because they
don’t
 communicate with each other.
For example
, my family doesn’t know many of their
neighbours
;
therefore
, they are not close to them.
Consequently
, they
don’t
 know many issues about society, leading to a
lack
 of social
skills
. When
people
don’t
 know who lives right next to them, they can’t acquire social
skills
 and will be oblivious
about
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 issues within their community. To address these problems, they should make social
gatherings
because
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ofbecause
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gatherings
. bBecause they can increase their social
skills
 lity by attending these
gatherings
.
Also
 , they have to help
people
 in need. because are trying to be close to their
neighbours
.
For example
, through social
gatherings
, many individuals can be closed are close to their
neighbours
 can establish closer relationships with their
neighbours
.
Moreover
, many
people
 help
people
 in need, so they can have fun funny and communicate with each other.
Consequently
, they should make neighbourhood groups to hang out, and support their
neighbours
. In conclusion,
people
 who live in big towns
don’t
 know their
neighbours
.
This
 problem can cause a
lack
 of social
skills
society
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in society
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 and awareness about significant social matters. As they make social groups,
and
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they can assist their
neighbours
.
Although
 it is hard, try it.
Then
 they can
solved
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solve
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 these problems.
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