We are becoming increasingly dependent on computers. They are used in business, hospitals, crime detection and even to fly planes. What things will they be used in the future? Is this dependence on computers a good thing or should be more suspicious of their benefits?

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common to see that
computers
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are used all over
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industries and
computers
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play a vital role in assisting humans to carry out
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task
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in an easier, smarter and
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profecient
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proficient
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, overreliance on the computer could lead
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humans to
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disaster
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.
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and demerits of dependence on
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are discussed below. On the one hand, In
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fast forwarding world, our economy requires tasks to
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out in
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aspect.
Computers
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are programmed with various software to work in an efficient way without any errors
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humans might take hours to complete. Even
a complicated calculations
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, huge bills can be carried out in a fraction of minutes. Air crafts Navigation system is controlled by
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computers
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called Auto-Pilots, Auto-Pilots
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by taking various feeds from different sensors which is the safer way to navigate. We can list en-numbers of uses of the
computers
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, if we want to know the travel time from point A to point B,we can get
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from the google maps in a fraction of seconds.
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,even though
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offers
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wide
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range of benefits to our
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booming
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economy but benefits of the
computers
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should not be under overeliance. we can make the best use of the
computers
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under
controlled
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environment i.e , typically a computer
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in the bank to
monitored
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carefully as they are involved with
softwares
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software
and hardware at any point
of
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time they can furnish errors.
To conclude
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,
usage
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the usage
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of
computers
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are
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beneficial to
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human kind
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humankind
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but overreliance and dependence must
be avoid
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to
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great extent.
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