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It is often said that we should work to live, not live to work. Discuss both points of view and give your own opinion.

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It is argued that
people
 should
work
 to live.It is
an
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a
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 necessity to live to earn money by
work
. Some
people
 have different
opinion
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opinions
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. for them to live to
work
 is their
opinion
.
This
 essay will discuss both views and present my
opinion
 .
People
 should
work
 to have
decent
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a decent
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 lifestyle.
Whereas
 they should not be burdened with
work
 always.
Primary
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The primary
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 reason for
work
 is to earn money and have financial security.
That is
 the reason
people
 learn new skills to
work
.
Furthermore
,It will help them in securing financial independence and
decent
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a decent
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 livelihood for their families. Companies have realised
this
 and try to balance
work
 and home priorities for their employees.
For
instance
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,instance
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 In
India
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,India
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people
work
 5 days
week
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a week
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whereas
 in
someasian
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some Asian
 countries it is
6days
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6 days
 a week.
Whereas
 few
people
 have
opinion
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the opinion
an opinion
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 that we should live to
work
. They are of
opinion
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the opinion
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 that in order to live we should
work
.
Moreover
In other words
 we should be
workaholic
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workaholics
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. Being workaholic means
work
 is always
priority
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a priority
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 for them and neglect
personal
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their personal
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 life. If we follow
this
 most
of
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apply
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the
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apply
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people
 will
complaint
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complain
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 about
imbalance
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the imbalance
an imbalance
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 in
personal
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their personal
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 and professional life.To cite an example,In
US
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the US
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 companies expect employees to be more productive if they are working from home. In conclusion , there should be
balance
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a balance
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 between priorities and we should
work
 to live .
work
 should be
mean
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meant
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 for earning
livelihood
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a livelihood
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.
people
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People
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 should have priorities regarding
personal
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their personal
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 and professional life.I believe that
people
 should live to
work
 .
This
 should
compliment
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complement
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 earning livelihood for
better
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a better
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 standard of living.
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