The problem with society today is that it is essentially unbalanced, with some people being paid huge salaries to work very long hours, whilst others do not have a job and have too much time on their hands. There is no middle ground. Do you agree or disagree?

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The unemployment rate has skyrocketed in many parts of the world in recent years.
While
limited
people
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are employed to
work
overtime and are remunerated handsomely,
majority
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the majority
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of
people
are out of
job
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the job
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.
Due to
this
, many
people
are struggling to feed their families and afford their basic necessities. In
this
essay, I will explain even though the disparity in income and
work
availability is happening, why I disagree that
this
is the case for
majority
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the majority
a majority
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of
people
.
Firstly
, limited
people
are well paid and
work
around the clock. These
people
are influential and / or have unique qualities and expertise that make them highly sought after in the
job
market.
For instance
, lawyers, doctors, chartered accountants, and computer professionals
work
longer hours and
also
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are also
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remunerated fairly for their effort. So it seems like they have an unfair advantage over other common
people
. On the other end, for many individuals, finding a
job
is extremely difficult.
People
are not getting a
job
even after applying and following up several times.
This
is simply
due to
the fact that there is far lower demand for workers than a number of
people
willing to
work
, and
also
a few who have access to
jobs
are doing multiple
jobs
at once. So many families have become and become homeless, have no access to proper healthcare and education
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and even have been struggling to put food on their plates. So our society seems totally imbalanced.
However
, I believe the situation is not as bad as it seems.
Although
there are many
such
extreme examples,
majority
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the majority
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of
people
are still maintaining a decent
work
-life balance. They have a day
job
, which earns them a living, and
also
allows them to have time with their loved ones and family. Yes, there are
people
around who are not
this
fortunate, and yet I believe
this
is the case for most
people
. In conclusion, few
people
have secured high-salary
jobs
and
work
longer hours to justify them. For others, it's hard to find
jobs
even if they have plenty of time available.
However
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I think
this
does not represent
majority
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the majority
a majority
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of the population. For me, most are working and doing leisure activities, attaining a
work
-life balance.
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