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The graph below shows the average closing prices of selected precious metals from 2013 to 2021.

The graph below shows the average closing prices of selected precious metals from 2013 to 2021.
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The line graph presents the average closing prices of specific noble metals between 2013 and 2021.
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, what stands out from the data is that the cost history of the precious metals fluctuated over the given period.
While
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 two of them
seen
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 growth, platinum has experienced a decline in
price
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. The
price
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 per oz. of gold and platinum from 2013 to 2015 was approximately 1500, it was relatively higher than palladium, which got a
price
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 of about 800 dollars. It plateaued
in
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this
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 level until the next year before experiencing its longest
increased
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 between 2016 and 2011, soaring dramatically to its peak
just
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 over 2400 dollars.
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, in 2015 platinum experienced a steady decline
about
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 500 and just hovered around that level for the remainder of the period.
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, gold stays relatively stable throughout the period reaching its highest
price
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 in 2021 at around 1800 dollars.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words price with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
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