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The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million).

The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million).
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The data illustrates the changes
of
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in
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 people who went
for
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on
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 global travel
in
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over
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 four various years.
Overall
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, what stands out from the data is that
,
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apply
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 the total number of travels increased throughout the given period.
While
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, most of the
countries
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country's
countries'
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 travel has seen growth, America
seen
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saw
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 a decline. The total number of
journey
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journeys
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 in 1990 was 448.9
million
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.
This
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 figure experienced a steady annual rise to reach an amount of 615.2
million
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 in 1995. It stays stable at
this
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 range and increased dramatically at its peak and end up at 693.7
million
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 by 2005. In 1990
trip
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a trip
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 to Europe accounts for the largest portion at about 280
million
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. The figure witnessed a
dramatically
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dramatic
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 annual ascent at
approoximately
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approximately
 400.2 in 2005
while
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,
Middle
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the Middle
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 East has the lowest number at 9.8
million
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.
However
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, it increased steadily throughout the period at least 15
million
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 in 2005. Asia and Africa
depicts
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depict
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 a relatively stable
increased
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increase
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,
whereas
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 America hovered around the same level at about 100
million
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 before experiencing a decline of at least 5
million
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 in 2005.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words million with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decline" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stable" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "dramatically" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • significant increase
  • international travel
  • popular destinations
  • economic growth
  • technological advancements
  • ease of travel
  • cultural exchange
  • globalization
  • fluctuations
  • trend
  • millions of travelers
  • annual growth rate
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