The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million).

The table describes the changes of people who went for international travel in 1990, 1995, 2000 and 2005. (million).
The data illustrates the changes
of
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people who went
for
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on
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global travel
in
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over
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four various years.
Overall
, what stands out from the data is that
,
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the total number of travels increased throughout the given period.
While
, most of the
countries
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country's
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travel has seen growth, America
seen
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saw
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a decline. The total number of
journey
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journeys
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in 1990 was 448.9
million
.
This
figure experienced a steady annual rise to reach an amount of 615.2
million
in 1995. It stays stable at
this
range and increased dramatically at its peak and end up at 693.7
million
by 2005. In 1990
trip
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to Europe accounts for the largest portion at about 280
million
. The figure witnessed a
dramatically
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annual ascent at
approoximately
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approximately
400.2 in 2005
while
,
Middle
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the Middle
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East has the lowest number at 9.8
million
.
However
, it increased steadily throughout the period at least 15
million
in 2005. Asia and Africa
depicts
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depict
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a relatively stable
increased
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,
whereas
America hovered around the same level at about 100
million
before experiencing a decline of at least 5
million
in 2005.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • significant increase
  • international travel
  • popular destinations
  • economic growth
  • technological advancements
  • ease of travel
  • cultural exchange
  • globalization
  • fluctuations
  • trend
  • millions of travelers
  • annual growth rate
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