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nNowadays, more and more children play computer games. Why do you think this is the case? Is it a positive or negative development?

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In today's era, electronic
games
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 are being played by a large
number
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 of young ones. There are a
number
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 of reasons behind
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 disturbing tendency likely the busy schedule of their parents which have a negative impact on their progress.
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 with, the first and foremost reason for
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 situation is the hectic timetable of their parents. To explain , both guardians are working to meet both ends which results in leaving their children at home with electronic gadgets to keep them busy by playing
games
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 on them.
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, a survey was conducted in Russia, in which it was observed that the
number
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 of young one playing
computer
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games
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 is 70 per cent as compared to the elder people.
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, the use of electronic devices for playing
games
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 has a negative effect on the physical
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 mental health of the kids. As children are playing
computer
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games
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, they are lacking concentration on their studies which will affect their higher studies. After that, by sitting all the time on the
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 the physical activity of the youth is
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 decreasing.
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 of
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, they are facing many medical problems
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 as obesity, headache and many more.
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, an article is published in the newspaper "The Times of India" which outlined the increment in the
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 of physical and mental problems that children face because of playing
computer
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games
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.
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,
although
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 the young ones are playing electronic
games
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 as they are not getting enough time from their parents,it is affecting them physically
as well as
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 mentally.
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Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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