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Describe a toy that you often played with as a child You should say: What the toy was? How old you were when you had it? Did you play with the toy by yourself or with other kids? And explain how you felt about this particular toy.

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When I was a kid growing up, I didn't really have a lot of toys, but I do remember
one
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 that I was particularly fond of. They were
Pokemon
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figures
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, are inspired by the famous Japanese manga,
Pokemon
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. I recall that I got it as a gift from
one
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 of my best friends. My parents had organized a birthday party at home for me, and everyone had come round to the house, and in the middle, we had the present-giving bit. I was so pleased to get my hands on it because I had always wanted
one
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 of these
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figures
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. So as I said, these toys were
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figures
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,
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 as Pikachu, Bulbasaur, and Charmander
Pokemon
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. It wasn't state of the art at all, just very simple, plastic
figures
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. They had many different types so I could spend a lot of time alone playing with them without getting bored.
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, Pikachu was basically a yellowish feather, Bulbasaur was greenish skin, and Charmander was highlighted with a reddish colour. I probably only played with it for a few months, but I kept it for years. It wasn't unique or valuable, so many kids had
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, but I think it had sentimental value for me. It reminded me of that birthday party. It was
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 of the best I have ever had.

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