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the diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.

the diagram below shows the floor plan of a public library 20 years ago and how it looks now.
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The given map depicts different
parts
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 of a public
library
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 and the changes that took place during
past
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the past
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 2 decades.
Overall
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, all
parts
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 of the
library
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 went through total deformation and either were moved to other
parts
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 or eliminated.
To begin
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 with, Central
library
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 20 years ago
was consist
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 of 7 various
parts
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 including, tables and chairs
section
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 right in front of the
entrance
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, enquiry desk on the right of the
entrance
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 and reading
room
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 on the left. After that, past these sections there were adult
fiction
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 and non-
fiction
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books
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 divided into 2 separate
parts
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 on both sides and
at the end
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 there was an entertainment
section
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 and a children’s
books
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section
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. Today’s plan for Central
library
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 illustrates considerable changes in every part of the
library
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for example
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, the named 2 sections on the left and right of the
entrance
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 are removed
in addition
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 to tables and chairs in front of the
entrance
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 and their place is occupied by computer
room
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 and cafe, adult
fiction
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books
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 are now available where it used to be occupied by non-
fiction
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books
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in addition
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 to self-service machines, in front of
this
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section
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instead
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 of adult
fiction
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books
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, reference
books
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 are available.
Subsequently
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, the entertainment
room
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 is now dedicated to storytelling events and children’s
fiction
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books
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 and
finally
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, the children’s part of the
library
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 is now a lecture
room
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.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "in addition".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words parts, library, section, entrance, room, fiction, books with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "tables" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • floor plan
  • layout
  • shelving
  • reading area
  • reference section
  • encyclopedias
  • dictionaries
  • circulation desk
  • transactions
  • digital media
  • computer stations
  • multimedia rooms
  • café area
  • social environment
  • leisure-friendly
  • expanded reading areas
  • user experience
  • comfortable seating
  • children's section
  • engage younger readers
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