You went to a museum with your elderly friend last week. However, he/she found it difficult to walk around the museum. Write a letter to the manager and say: * Whom did you visit the museum with? * What problems/inconveniences did he/she face? * also, suggest solutions to enhance the museum visit experience for an elderly person.

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Dear Sir or Madam, After greetings, I am writing
this
letter to you to grab your attention about some problems that exist in the museum, I visited the place
last
week with my cousin,
although
he is sixty-five years old and he is a pensioner, he is still interested in visiting ancient places
such
as the local museum. I would like to inform you that we faced numerous issues there related to our
last
visiting
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,
firstly
, the place is so wide
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therefore
it would be difficult for senior citizens to take a tour and enjoy the whole parts of the museum,
secondly
, the numbers of rest seats are less than the potential visitors who come regularly,
thus
most older people had to stand up the whole time of visiting. I strongly suggest that you should expand the rest units area even though the local authority would not accept
this
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demands we can arrange
this
from donations,
moreover
, you have to make available options for wheelchairs only for older people and
disabled
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the disabled
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. I am looking forward to seeing your kind actions. Yours sincerely, John Adam
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Accessibility
  • Mobility issues
  • Inconveniences
  • Adequate facilities
  • Elderly-friendly
  • Resting areas
  • Impaired vision/hearing
  • Ramps
  • Elevators
  • Wheelchairs
  • Motorized scooters
  • Audio guides
  • Hearing aid compatibility
  • Assistive devices
  • Staff assistance
  • Special tours
  • Ergonomic seating
  • Visual aids
  • Multisensory exhibits
  • Inclusive design
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