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With an increasing population communicating via the internet and text messaging, face to face communication will become a thing of the past. To what extent do you agree?

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In the contemporary world, with the ever-developing technology and ever-increasing variations of technological
devices
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 many
people
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 tend to alter their
communication
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 methods gradually. In my opinion,
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 there are plausible arguments to support face-to-face conversation is still crucial today, there are
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 reasons to disagree with it. The major reason why Internet and
text
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 messaging sharply supersede face-to-face
communication
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 is its convenience and accessibility. Today, thanks to
telephone
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the telephone
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 and computer,
people
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 can easily communicate with each other.
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, long distance is not an obstacle anymore for many
people
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 because they can make a call or
text
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 each other every time and everywhere thanks to their technological devices.
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, reports are indicated by telephone companies that are Samsung and Apple, an increasing number of
people
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 in the world preferred to communicate by means of
Internet
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the Internet
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 and
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 messaging in the
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 decades.
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 to the argument clarified above, there is
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 a significant reason to be against face-to-face conversation is not popular and common among
people
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 nowadays.
People
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 are social creatures and they need to express their feelings;
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, technological devices are not sufficient to convey their feelings
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 as happiness, sadness and curiosity and much more. In
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light of
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 reality, if
people
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 want to communicate in a healthy way and almost exactly understand each other, they have to communicate with each other
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face to face.
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, it is possible to associate
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 a
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 style with a variety of positive effects, one of which is its effectiveness.
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, having elucidated both perspectives, I think it can be concluded that communicating through Internet and
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 messaging is more eligible than face-to-face
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 but face-to-face
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 is essential for more quality
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 and it
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still take part in
people
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's lives.
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