The bar chart shows the top ten countires for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and make comparison where relevant.

The bar chart shows the top ten countires for the production and consumption of electricity in 2014. Summarize the information by selecting and make comparison where relevant.
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The bar graph illustrates the amount of electricity produced and used among 10 different nations around the world in the year 2014, measured in billions of
kWh
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Overall
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, China and the United States came on top of the list,
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8 remaining countries were relatively similar in figure. Meanwhile, Germany was the only country that consumed more current than the amount they made and Russia had both almost equally. In the year 2014, the volume of production in China reached 5,398
billion
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kWh
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and residents used up to 3,866
billion
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kWh
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, which made the country 1st in the ranking. Followed by China was the US with 4,099
billion
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kWh
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manufactured,
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3,866
kWh
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was utilised.
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the rest of the nations remained just under 1,057
billion
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and the lowest was 485.1
Billion
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kWh
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in Korea, respectively.
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, citizens of Germany had a notably higher usage which amounted to 582.5
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kWh
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, in comparison to the total supply they manufactured, which was 526.6
billion
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kWh
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, Russia had around less than a 20
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kWh
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difference between its production and utilisation figures.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Replace the words kwh, billion with synonyms.
Vocabulary: The word "figure" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • megawatt-hour (MWh)
  • capacity
  • output
  • distribution
  • consumption
  • production
  • renewable energy
  • non-renewable energy
  • surplus
  • deficit
  • trend
  • pattern
  • discrepancy
  • regional
  • anomaly
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