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Some experts believe that it is better for children to begin learning a foreign language at primary school rather than secondary school. Do the advantages of this outwiegh the disadvantages?

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It is common nowadays in many primary schools to commence teaching foreign languages as it is easier for the young ones to get hold of it
however
 there are merits and demerits of educating in primary schools, which
this
 essay will describe
further
. On the one hand, it is an excellent idea to learn a foreign
language
 at primary
school
 itself as
this
 will help them to take a deep route in the
language
 as their young. In a recent survey published by the Government of India, the fact came to light that primary
school
 children's brain has more capability to observe the required skills for learning other country native-speaking languages.
Furthermore
, primary
school
 children are not occupied with a heavy burden in studies as compared with secondary
school
 children which allows them space to learn in a comfortable manner.
On the other hand
, secondary
school
 pupils are required to concentrate on various aspects i.e., preparing for higher studies, and pursuing a university which requires them to take additional courses
hence
 it is not suitable for secondary
school
 gents to start learning a foreign
language
 at
this
 stage.
On the other hand
, secondary
school
 pupils are required to concentrate on various aspects i.e., preparing for higher studies, and pursuing a university which requires them to take additional courses
hence
 it is not suitable for secondary
school
 gents to start learning a foreign
language
 at
this
 stage.
To conclude
, a foreign
language
 can be taught in primary schools
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 advantages outweigh the disadvantages.
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The response does not fully address the task. Ensure that the essay discusses both the advantages and disadvantages of learning a foreign language at primary school, and provides a balanced argument.

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